summer dawn’s dazzle
doesn’t make that much difference
the Piscataqua
--Tom D'Evelyn
Wonderful display of tensions.
The first line is almost unreadable, letting sound come through the text of season, time of day and motion.
Then this is allowed to waffle in the second line so that the punch of the third line hits as a double take -- all flow beneath the surface.
-- Madeleine Findlay
